Easttle Test - Writing
Do you agree that sport is better than music ? Well I have 2 important facts which all are very interesting and might perswade you to agree with me.
I personally agree that you need to be able to play sport to be able to keep yourself fit and healthy. Perhaps you could win a race or a triathlon because you put the time and effort into playing sport.
Secondly I believe that you could end up with a very good looking body if you play sports. I also believe that sports is practically the same as working at the gym except you are just working on your thighs.
So now I have explained to you why “ Sport is better than music “ you should say to me … Yes, sport is better than music because of all the good reasons. And I would say you are totally right. But are you going to do more sports ?
Anais Brodie
Goals to add detailed sentences
Hi Anais, I like how you put your goal at the bottom and by Lucky net I think you have achieved your goal, I really like all the punctuation you put in your sentences as well but you could add a bit more of detail. But otherwise it was a great story.
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